He was thrilled. He had managed to find a spot in a secluded corner. Amidst the crowd. Just in time...
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He was thrilled. He had managed to find a spot in a secluded corner. Amidst the crowd. Just in time. Away from the din and noise. He paused for a moment in front of the banana leaf. And then sat down, cross-legged. It was more comfortable that way. It was time to sample the feast. He eyed the spread slowly, taking in all the items one at a time - the rice, the sambhar, and the curries. And yes, there was his favourite pickle. He let the aromatic flavours tease his senses briefly; and then began feasting.
The fare was delightful. The rice - well cooked. The sambhar - to die for! The curries - tingling the taste buds! The papad – crispy all right. The kheer - just heavenly! Satiated, he patted his well-rounded stomach with a smug smile; and banished thoughts of a second helping with a soft belch. That was the most fantastic feast he had had in the past few months. Satisfied, he rose to leave. It would be a while before he felt hungry again. Until then, the next garbage bin would simply have to wait.
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Hi PF
Isn't it sad? The day he got to *feast* would reckon as one of the brighter days of his life, I guess.
Feels good to get a thumbsup from you. Thanks!
Mel
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Kalyanee
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Thanks
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Hello Easwar
Welcome to my blogs.
Thanks so much for the endorsement and approbation. Your comment though short, is extremely sweet.
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Dr. Madhvi
Yeah, perhaps I could have added some more detail to the ending. Thanks for stopping by.
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Yashji
Thanks Yashji, for calling my experimentation successful. It's very encouraging to hear your appreciation.
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Indu
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I know
Thanks for coming over. You are such a sweetheart
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Hiya BigM
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Wow! Your comment is longer than my story!
I see what you are trying to say.
About the short sentences, I'm never a person to write sentences three lines long without a break. That ain't my style at all. I have narrated the story in exactly the same way it happened in my head. I'm sorry you found it jarring. About the ending though, I agree with you. Perhaps I could have added a little more detail. But then I had wanted the story to be like that. So
And hey, I don't attend any creative writing classes. They are so expensive, I can't afford them LOL. Like you said, I'm an amateur writer who writes for the pleasure of it.
Rest assured, all that you have said has been taken in the right spirit. So smile
Regards
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Dear MQ,
Succinct and poignant.....
Mala
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Quasimodo (Nice moniker
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Welcome to my blogs.
Yeah, the intention was to provoke readers' thoughts.
Thanks for liking it!
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Bina
Sad but true, isn't it? Leftovers of one person are the meal for another person.
Thanks for swinging by and for the first comment (always very special, no?)
Regards
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